Really like the story, I also like the part of it being in the forest ! I can play up until the point of chapter 1(age 13) - is that as far as the story goes at the moment? I also noticed that the MC's gender changes in the text sometimes, mine where a male MC, and it sometimes said her, herself etc. :)
a bit difficult to read at times, some lines that are actually spoken are not marked with quotations marks or wirtten in one single line, as it was close to the end.
for interactive fiction it would be better to write in the first person from the protagonists perspective, but its simply a better flavor
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and provide feedback on my story.. It's my first time writing a story, and your insights are incredibly helpful. I'll use your advice as I continue to develop my storytelling skills.
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Really like the story, I also like the part of it being in the forest ! I can play up until the point of chapter 1(age 13) - is that as far as the story goes at the moment? I also noticed that the MC's gender changes in the text sometimes, mine where a male MC, and it sometimes said her, herself etc. :)
Thank you for reading...i am trying to make corrections and do some editing's. Thanks for your patience ..
I like this one, great premise
a bit difficult to read at times, some lines that are actually spoken are not marked with quotations marks or wirtten in one single line, as it was close to the end.
for interactive fiction it would be better to write in the first person from the protagonists perspective, but its simply a better flavor
all in all keep up the good work
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and provide feedback on my story.. It's my first time writing a story, and your insights are incredibly helpful. I'll use your advice as I continue to develop my storytelling skills.
No problen at all
I actually forgot to mention something:
using the 1st person for the protgonist allows you to use the 3rd person for other characters perspective if you so wish
I will keep an eye on this project, looking forward to a continueation